the parts i remember
I had a dream and you were in it
the parts I remember, anyway
had a thick tongue all that morning
In a car we were trying to make it
to California
but the problem is it isn’t clear
As soon as I remember I forget
and by the time I have my coffee
the wheels have come off the wagon
Have to have a second cup
to make sure
the parts I remember, anyway
had a thick tongue all that morning
In a car we were trying to make it
to California
but the problem is it isn’t clear
As soon as I remember I forget
and by the time I have my coffee
the wheels have come off the wagon
Have to have a second cup
to make sure
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So how do you know when your poems are finished? Do they need to be finished? Do you intentionally select them to be short or is that just how it happens to flow through you head while you write?
I'm not all that comfortable with anything long form so everything I do tends to be pretty short. As far as the poems go, they feel finished when the original idea I had feels complete. I try to convey the idea with as few words as possible. Language itself dictates how much I want a poem to have, too. If I write a line I'm happy with and seems like a reasonable ending, I usually stop there. There's kind of a weird feeling I have that if I push it too far with any one piece that I'm going to run out of words.